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I've been sleeping with my jeans on
and seatbelt unbuckled,
So I can leave early
before my regret wakes.

In the check-in, on the road,
I distract myself
Walk, go, leave
go further, leave again
I like my life
Oversimplified.

I never meant to break your
working-class heart
(steady and warm)
But truer ways of joy I found
on the road,
in long railways and stranger tongues
And I'm sorry that we never
Quite catch up with each other.

I never loved goodbyes,
but I love leaving all behind
In the movement I found tranquility,
easing for this burn.

Don't think I'll be able
To ever forget you, no

You're like Venus in the nightly sky,
guiding with your sulphur burn -
you left a mark in me,
      in the air I breathe
Though we never quite catch up,
we never quite meet.

And it breaks my heart either way;
I don't want to leave,
but I cannot stay.
Some very honest thought about loving and leaving.
If you liked it, please comment! I love faves but comments really make my day, even if it's just a smiley. :heart:

(I love my new Android phone, it's so great for writing poetry! Much easier than carrying a notebook around)

EDIT: Now also in audio form, [link] read by disrhythmic! :heart: Go listen to it!
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Given 2012-11-09
Wanderlust by ~Peemu touches on the duality of wanting to leave and wanting to stay says the suggester, who went on to add the regret mentioned in the beginning adds some depth to whether she's running away from something or running to find her way back home. When reading this poem I can't help but cheer the narrator on and hope she runs into what she's looking for.... ( Suggested by mellowghost and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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imapoopie Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutly love this!!!! Out of all my writing pieces i have in my literature folder this is my fave by far!!
Its so strong, so emotional yet so cold all at once...
Its right and wrong all at the same time!!
Amazing!!
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Peemu Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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PrincessLela Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This is extremely well done. I loved it! :)
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OnyxiusART Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"In long railways and stranger tongues"-
twas my favorite line. :)
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LoveDoesNotExist Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I disagree! I love writing in a notebook. So much better than digital. I feel more artistic with real paper. (sorry for the trees) Oh, and a great poem!
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Mint22 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
Ha! I liked this so much that I put it up on the wall in my room.
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Peemu Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Writer
I'm honored! :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Doesn't she read beautifully?
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Peemu Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
She indeed does! I'm so glad for the reading :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Hi. :wave: I'm a reader for #Elocutionists and I read this out loud. I'd love to put it up on our blog ([link]), if that's alright with you. You can listen to my reading here: [link] :heart:

Let me know if you like it. <3 I loved reading it.
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